I've brought you a boy braided in hide, the heart of a she-demon hidden inside.
He climbed on the Sotern one May afternoon and hid in my skiff til middle of June.
Later we heard of the tempest-woman who searched the docks with a frightful coven
shreiking for her little, her child of leather, the boy who held her soul together.
Son, keep him safe, keep his limbs tightly bound, for this is the magic I have found.
If the boy rides high, safe and dry, the witch grants you ever-smooth seas and blue sky.

Ignore the whimpers, adventure awaits.

10 comments:

Phil W said...

Very interesting nautical romp with both charm and creepiness. Good job.

Michelle Davidson Argyle said...

Love this one! You took this a step further with rhyme and rhythm. Very nice. I love the world-building in this in so very few words. Thanks for sharing!

AidanF said...

Chilling use of the boy. Loved the opening line. "I brought you a boy braided in hide, the heart of a she-demon hidden inside." This tells so much about the whole story and love the world that feels so robust about this piece. You accomplished a lot with your 100 words.

C. N. Nevets said...

I echo Michelle: loved the world-building here, B. Great job!

S.D. Smith said...

Impressive and eerie. Well done!

Loren Eaton said...

Great ambiguity in this one, particularly in that last line. Methinks I'm hearing echoes of The Rime of the Ancient Mariner and The Odyssey in it. I could see a longer piece (please?) coming out of this one.

Donna Hole said...

This was a nice surprise B. Loved the implication of the Gods. Sailors have such fascinating superstitions.

Have a Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.

........dhole

B. Nagel said...

Phil -

Glad I could charm and creep you. I always love/hate Loren's 100 word shindigs.

Michelle -

So happy you liked it. If my Captain is the man absent from your cabin, your protag is better off without him. He doesn't even wash his feet. Yech.

Aidan -

I really feel for the hide-bound boy, but he's keeping secrets you may not care to learn. Neither might I.

Nevets -

My world is footed in a hundred clearance-bin adventure novels with nautical glosses. Those and wikipedia hold most of my sea-faring knowledge.

Sam -

Thanks!

Loren -

I bow before the Clockwork Daemon, which sets us all in motion for the Christmas Eve Story-Fest. For development purposes, I'll be dropping the rhythm and rhyme, but I do see this piece stretching into something larger.

Donna -

Merry Holidays to you as well. Thank you for stopping in best to you and yours.

Phoenix said...

A little late to the party, but:

Very well done! I can definitely see this scratched on the side of a ship somewhere. Wow. Incredibly cool imagery.

Nicely written, B. Keep kicking ass.

Okie said...

I really like this. Very compelling. Well done!

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